Do you have problems getting things done? Do you feel that you
procrastinate too often? This is a very large issue, especially for
teenagers my age. However, there is a possible solution to this problem.
School is very important for our youth. However, a lot of our youth
does not realize this. Therefore, their parents and teahers are the
ones pushing them to get as good of an education as possible. With the
parents and teachers thinking this way, they are disappointed when you
do not do as well as they know you can do. For a lot if teenagers,
what their parents think about them is a big deal. Therefore, if they
are disappointed in them, this can cause minor or serious emotional
pain.
Most people do something that they want to do rather than what they
are supposed to do when they are procrastinating. You may be playing
video games, listening to music, or talking on the phone when you are
supposed to be doing your homework. This could result in bad grades in
school.
My proposal is that you do what I do. When I have something
important to do but I want to do something else, I do what I need to
do, and I use what I want to do as a motive to make sure that what I
need to do gets done. For example, if I really want to play video
games, but I know that I need to wash the dishes, I would wash the
dishes, all the while thinking about the video games. I would
constantly remind myself, "All you need to do is finish, then you
could play yor video games." Saying this pushes me to get the dishes
done.
Having something or someone pushing you to do what is important for
you to do can be very beneficial. This can help people to get their
school work done. Getting school work done will help you to get better
grades. Better grades will help boost both your self-esteem and your
parents faith in your skills. This will help your emotional health to
either become better or stay on the sufficient level that it is at.
Hopefully, you will use this technique to better your health.
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ReplyDeleteOverall, good essay. Though, for the title try not to put 'persuasive essay', just 'good habits.'
'Most people do something that they want to do rather than what they
are supposed to do when they are procrastinating.' I suggest rephrasing this another way because to me, as the reader, it seems to wordy, which will cause confusion.
Regarding the use of "I", you can use it, but really it seems more of opinion than fact.
It's a good essay, however I suggest putting a thesis in your intrduction. You really didn't have one and left me wondering you were talking about.
ReplyDeleteThank you sir.From your essay. I got an idea to write one of my persuasive essay in school.On one of my good habit.And it was the best essay in my class.And my teacher appreciated to me.All credit goes to you .Really Sir .Once again.THANK YOU SO MUCH.
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ReplyDeleteSuper sir.This is very useful for me .Thankyou very much.
ReplyDeleteIs this all about starting a good habit
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